Feb. 5th, 2010 08:15 am
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Title: Bam
Pairing: Ianto/Lisa ,Jack, team
Rating: nc-17
Word count:  428 words

Spoilers: Cyberwoman
Disclaimer: I don't own Torchwood or any of the characters

Warning: big angst
Summary:  Maybe Ianto is not strong enough....
Beta:  [ profile] frakkin_addict 




It’s too hard, too hard… I can’t… This time I give up… The young man walks in the dark passage. He feels so old, so tired, so weak. All his body screams for a kind of redemption; he just wants to lay down on the ground and sleep; forever. But he knows it’s just an insane dream; he has to be strong for her. Each step echoes in the air, bam, bam, like a macabre parade of his shit life.


She lies there alone in this dark room. She is beautiful in her deep sleep, like a queen in all her magnificence. When he looks at her Ianto Jones forgets all his problems; he knows what love is. He caresses her soft skin, kisses her gorgeous lips. I just want to scream; forever. The young man carefully puts his head on her chest. He closes his eyes, listens the regular and comforting rhythm of her breath; I love you Lisa. In the dark room, the young man forgets his pain, takes her hand and let her heartbeat rock him softly: bam, bam.


His hands work like a rigid dance; the young man makes coffees for the others without thinking about what he does. Like everyday, every moment of my life… A repetition of my emptiness… Around him, the team is laughing and yelling; they are alive… A giggle explodes in his throat; Ianto Jones has to restrain it; there is no place for happiness in his life. Not while she lies there alone; forever. Then he sees him, proud and strong in his magnificence, like a king; Jack why don’t you see me? Hear me? But the young man knows he is just a fool; there is no big damn hero in his life. Jack’s laugh explodes in the air; bam, bam.


 Ianto Jones feels like he has a tear running through his insidesThe sensation of losing and winning all at the same time… Falling or flying? I am lost… She lies down on the ground, her blood like a red blanket, miserable and ugly in her last act. Lisa Hallett is dead. The young man kneels beside her; the scream explodes inside him; I lost her… forever… Then he hears her again. But she’s not Lisa; or maybe she is? Another body… Another monster… She implores his redemption; he begs silently for her forgiveness… I am not strong enough... The sound of the bullets echo in the air like thunder; BAM. The others execute the monster; forgive me Lisa, I failed. 


La fin


Date: 2010-02-05 02:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Love it! So heartbreaking for Ianto but really good my friend*hugs*

Date: 2010-02-05 09:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thank you very much my lovely ;)

Date: 2010-02-05 02:47 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile]
I just love the angstiness in this one. You've really captured the emotions that Ianto must have been feeling. It's beautiful in its sadness and despair. Awesome job! :D

Date: 2010-02-05 09:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Hoo wow, I love when someone talk about the emotions in my writtens, its so hard to write, thank you so much to take the time to tell me what you like !!! *HUGS*

Date: 2010-02-05 03:04 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile]
Oh wow, the emotions are really well captured. It's so heartbreaking for Ianto. Great one :D

Date: 2010-02-05 09:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thanks ma chérie, its how I see his moment of his life. *bisous*

Date: 2010-02-05 05:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I love the use of the loud "Bam" used in juxtaposition with Ianto's quiet despair. It quite beautiful.

Date: 2010-02-05 09:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I happy very happy you enjoyed it, I tried to write a kind of rythm in this fic, and the bam its good for that, kind of breaking in the drama slow...

Thanks so much :)

Date: 2010-02-05 08:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
That was heartbreaking beautiful, loved it. *hugs*

Date: 2010-02-05 09:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thanks so much ma chère amie, I am very happy you love it!!!!! *HUGS*

Date: 2010-02-05 10:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
So much feeling. I think I actually flinched a little at the final BAM.
You are a wonderful writer *hugs*

Date: 2010-02-06 03:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Naaaaaaaaaaaaa, to read your comment always make me so proud of my written !!!!!

Thanks!!!! *HUGS*

Date: 2010-02-06 12:32 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
OH wow, this is so sad and so beautifully done! *HUGS*

Date: 2010-02-06 03:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Merci my friend *hug*

Date: 2010-02-08 12:16 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
just wondering was you listing to Bam Bam by Blue Gillspie (Gareth's band)when you worte this?
Really liked the fic great job =o)

Date: 2010-02-08 12:29 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Ha !Ha ! Well, not when I wrote this fic, but a lot before.... ;)

Thanks so much!! :D


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