first torchwood fic ever ...

[morgia]

ok, this is my first torchwood fic... its because put_that_away and cherry_soup888  believe in me and because  just_being_me08  is so fabulous and wonderful beta I put this fic here...
English is not my first language... Good lecture ;)

Don’t be afraid Ianto Jones

 

The alley is dark and stinking. A bad place to die thinks the man now lying on the ground. A red stain on his perfect suit, looks like almost pretty in the contrast with the white shirt covering his stomach. The shivers come to him like waves, an awful pain tearing up his body. He’s going to die and he knows it. He’s alone, a light rain falling softly like a caress on his face. The darkness is coming, slowly bring him into its arms.

“Ianto, it’s going to be all right.” Says a voice at his side.

The man turns around to see a beautiful Japanese woman look at him with a warm smile.

“Tosh, your dead...” Whispers the man.

“Yes I am. Ianto I’m here for you, don’t be afraid.” Answers the young woman in return.

“Tosh, it hurts... The pain…. I don’t want to die.” He says like a prayer.

“I’m sorry my friend, I’m so sorry...” She says before she disappears.

 

The alley is dark and stinking. A man lies there alone, he’s going to die and he knows it.

“Hey tea boy, what are you doing here?” Says a voice at his side.

“Owen……..what’s it like to die?” Questions the man with a deep groan within his voice.

“Tea boy, where’s your famous captain? What? He doesn’t want to shag you anymore?” The apparition replies with a grin.

“Me and Jack it’s more than that, I’m more than a shag for him...”

“If you say so...”

“Owen, I don’t want to die...”

“Ianto, it’s going to be all right.” He says before he disappears.

 

The alley is dark and stinking. A man lies there alone, he’s going to die and he knows it.

“Ianto, my beautiful lover.” Says a voice beside him.

“Lisa….. my Lisa.” Replies the man with a cry in his voice.

“Ianto, I love you, I always will...”

“Lisa, takes away the pain, please...”

“Come back to me my love….” She says before she disappears.

 

The alley is dark and stinking. A man lies there alone, he’s going to die and he knows it.

“My poor little boy, what’s happened to you?” Says a warm voice beside him.

“Mum, please take me home!” Says the man who’s crying now.

“My baby, I’m here for you...”

“Mother, it hurts. I’m so cold...”

“Shhh, I’m here baby, I’m here..” Says his mother before she disappears.

 

The alley is dark and stinking. A man lies there alone, he going to die and he knows it.

“Ianto!” Shouts a voice approaching him.

The man smiles, he knows who it is.

“Ianto, look at me. I’m here now, you’ll be fine, I promise...” Says the man beside him, a hand on his wound, trying to stop the blood from flowing out.

“Jack, it hurts, please take the pain away...” Begs the man in a soft voice, almost like sigh.

“Oh no, don’t you dare! You’re not going to die, Ianto stay with me!” Orders the other man like he trying to convince himself more than Ianto.

“Jack, I’m sorry...” Murmurs the man on the ground before the darkness takes him away like a mother rocks a child.

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A man lies there in white room, on a white blanket, his face is so pale, but this time the man is not alone. Slowly his eyes open, his eyelids so heavy, as if he’s seeing the light for the first time in his life.

“Ianto…..” Says a soft voice beside him.

“Jack……” Whispers the man like a dream.

“Ianto please….always come back to me.” Replies the other man at his ear, words like a kiss.

 “Always Jack, always... “ Says the man lying there before returning into the welcoming darkness.

 

Fin

Comments

[put-that-away.livejournal.com]

OMG!!!! Nadine that was so beautiful and brilliant and PERFECT!!! You shouldn't have been nervous about it! I LOVED it and I am saving it to my memories to read again and again.

Thank you for sharing such a lovely story with us
Fliss
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[just-being-me08.livejournal.com]

Well, you know what I think since I've already read it....:P But I wanted to leave a comment anyway! I really really do love this! I told you that you didn't need to worry about this! It is just so good! So so sad, but so well written. It is so beautiful and you know what? You better write more very soon!! :D

*lots of hugs for you!!*
Sian
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[cherry-soup888.livejournal.com]

WOW!
THAT WAS GORGEOUS!
I LOVED IT!
I swear to God hunny, your language skills are amazing.
The fic was beautiful and yay for you!
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[angst-queen-98.livejournal.com]

Well done! Impressive for a first fic. :) I like seeing the various people that Ianto 'see's. And that they don't stay was encouraging to me. Rightfully so, as his Captain found him once again and saved the day!

Glad you ventured into the writing world. Congratulations! And thanks for sharing with us, too.

[thrace-adams.livejournal.com]

Oh that was so sad!!! Well done!

[elanor12.livejournal.com]

Wow. C'est superbe. J'adore, c'est très beau, simple et très touchant. Et c'est ta première!? eh bien, c'est réussis :)

Et j'ai remarqué que tu viens du Québec, alors c'est pour ça que je commente en français, un terrain linguistique que je maîtrise mieux que l'anglais hihi.

[christine-twfan.livejournal.com]

Yeah!!! This was wonderful, sweetie. I love how he saw his loved ones, and how each of them gave him a bit of strength to keep going. Fantastic. :)

[http://users.livejournal.com/_miss_daisy_/]

That was really good! Ianto seeing everyone he's known that has died was a great idea. I can' believe this is your first fic though! Very good honey! ;D

[cprefect.livejournal.com]

Beautiful.

[foreverjack.livejournal.com]

WOW, for first fic it was terrific, I liked the way you introduced to us all the dead and loved people by Ianto and how none of them encouraged to follow his/her.
Of course, gorgeous Jack cannot simply let Ianto day and saved him, giving the necessary strength to come back to him.
Thanks for sharing! (English isn´t my first language too)