I loved it just the way it was. The scene with the young woman was beautifully written. I could really sense the desire and the passion.
I could see your love of jazz in this story. I loved that you put that part of yourself into the story. And I agree that characters shouldn't be all bad and all good. You did a good job with that, making her believable.
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branchandroot
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Date: 2010-03-21 01:32 am (UTC)I could see your love of jazz in this story. I loved that you put that part of yourself into the story. And I agree that characters shouldn't be all bad and all good. You did a good job with that, making her believable.
You're awesome! xoxox